Ok, this is not for me.
70 odd pages and no hint of a plot, just a lot of scene setting and Victorian historical information.
I get that this is likely to be character or society study rather than a plot-driven novel, which is fair enough, but I’m not digging the writing. There is a lot of info-dumping, telling rather than showing, and circular writing:
And again, a pre-teen / early teen questioning their “capability to love”?
Not for me.
Not a fan of reading someone’s journal pretending to be a story . Many people don’t care but long ago I reat Crusie/Mayer blog on how to write a book and if it can’t be done with dialog , then rewrite it. Never forgot and it is my preferred story style.
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Yeah, there seems to be an omniscient narrator that jumps from character to character and tells us how they are feeling, rather than showing us through actions of dialogue.
I’m sure it can work if this is limited to a first person narration or made to sound different than what it sounds like in this book.